Writing - Week 7 Term 2

Hello my lovelies! Welcome back to my blog! We are out of lockdown, so no more lockdown blogs! Woohoo! Hope you all enjoy!

Writing this week was about show not tell. This was pretty fun. Our first task was to make these sentences show not tell. 

It was hot

He was sad

The man was stressed

The girl was excited

Now I will give you an example for, He was sad.

The boy sat, alone, wiping his eyes, which now were red, from crying. He stood up and walked away like nothing happened

Our next task was to create a paragraph using show not tell. Here is mine.

I stare into the darkness. The moonlight glows between the tall branches. I unzip the ten a little more, glancing out at the dying fire. I silently step out, cool evening air filling my lungs. I look around to make sure nobody is awake, my eyes roaming around the campsite. Nobody is awake. I stare out at the liquidy, black night sky. I scrunch my nose at the smell of fresh dewy grass mixed with damp trees. My foot finds ground against the crunching leaves outside of the tent, and the breeze blows against my hair, causing it to billow out behind me. I start walking outside, the wind whipping against my neck. Then I see it. Eyes, peering out from the trees. I back up, stretching my arms far behind me for support. I look closer, just to realise they were merely gleams of the pond nearby. I sigh, relieved and also embarrassed by my own stupidity. I sit down by the fire, staring at the pulsating embers. I look up at the night sky, and inhale the fresh late night air. I look around at the night sky, and wish my family was here, rather than my schoolmates. They dropped me off, and abandoned me, like a kitten in a box on the side of a road. I sigh as I sit down in one of the small, overpriced camping chairs. I can see the sunrise going to happen in a few hours, by the position of the moon. I decide that my opportunity is now. I grab my tent and everything inside and hurriedly stuff it into a bag. As I am just about to leave, I hear an opening sound, and I freeze in my spot. I crouch down, hoping to be concealed by the darkness. 

“I can see you, Amari” I hear a voice say. I run…

So yeah!

 I hope you guys enjoyed my blog today! Can you  give me an example of show not tell? Tell me in the comments! Bye!